After receiving feedback from Aodhan on my animatic, I have changed it and updated my storyboard. Eden is no longer half demon because it seemed clunky and didn’t appear at all in the rest of the story. I’ve also been more conscious of where the characters are perceived to be in the segment, making it clearer for the viewer.
To cut it down even more, I cut the establishing shot to have it start from Jenkins’ perspective- and instead of dialogue or on screen exposition I used sounds from the TV to get across some key ideas.
Sound used:
In asking Sarah for feedback on this version of my animatic, I got some good ideas on how I could cut it further and make the overall process more doable for me. I had chosen the opening shot with the TV in the foreground because I wanted specific attention brought to it, but I think as long as it’s clear within the shot and a character interacts with it, it will give the same effect.